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Post by Sunny on Feb 27, 2011 3:12:31 GMT -5
THE PlOT THICKENS!!! dan dan daaaahhhhn!!!! lol. this story is really interesting and really well written. i am enjoying it immensly. cant wait for the next chapter!!
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Post by mrjop2 on Feb 27, 2011 3:58:33 GMT -5
Thank you very much. I hope you continue to enjoy it.
In chapter 4, I did make a mistake that I had to go back and fix. I had said that Bitwolf discovered the dragons and reported back to Ivar and did not tell him about the dragons.
That was actually supposed to be Wolfbane, not Bitwolf. I have just made the correction.
Ivar's second-in-command is Wolfbane (the man who actually discoved the dragons but kept it a secret from Ivar). Bitwolf is Wolfbane's son, who will make his first appearance in this next chapter.
I apologize for the confusion.
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Post by Sunny on Feb 27, 2011 5:48:21 GMT -5
OOPS, I didnt even notice!!! oh! and your welcome!! ^-^
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 2, 2011 23:24:06 GMT -5
(Again, I just wanted to reiterate. Last chapter I had gotten the names mixed up. I said Bitwolf when I meant Wolfbane. Wolfbane is the second in command under Ivar the Fearsom. Bitwolf is Wolfbane's son.)
Chapter 5: Dragon Training
Coming back to the arena brought back some not-so-fond memories. The moment Hiccup followed his friends inside, he began to relive the time when he last went through dragon training. Now, he was about to relive his worst nightmare, and go through all the embarrassment once again.
Everyone else did not seem to care about having to redo the training. Snotlout, like always, was ready to prove that he should be top of the class. Ruffnut and Tuffnut were more focused on trying to prove to each other who was the better Viking. Fishlegs seemed eager to show off his knowledge about dragons, but Hiccup doubted that the new teacher would be impressed by mere knowledge of dragons. Astrid was ready to unleash her strength, again determined not to be outdone by any of the boys. Despite her aggressive demeanor, Hiccup knew he could trust her not to allow any dragons to be harmed during this retraining.
As the young Vikings entered the arena, Wolfbane stood in the center, ready to get the training on the way. Gobber stood next to him, determined not to be outdone by the visiting Viking. The kids all stood in a line as Wolfbane was ready to start the lesson. “Welcome to dragon training. You’ve all been through training once before, but it’s the opinion of the chief Viking, that you be retrained the correct way.”
Gobber rolled his eyes, but restrained himself from saying anything in front of the class. Wolfbane commenced his address to the class. “I won’t be the one training you. My son, Bitwolf, will be the one training you.”
A young Viking stepped out from behind Wolfbane. Bitwolf was about the same height as Tuffnut, but with bulging muscles. He had long, black, silky hair and a red head band with a painted on image of a dragon skull. He had the face of someone who was in his early twenties instead of that a young boy. His dark blue eyes were very piercing, especially to young female Vikings; Ruffnut and Astrid were no different. Their eyes bulged at the sight of the extremely handsome young Viking.
Unlike other Vikings, he did not wear much armor. He wore a sleeveless black tunic underneath a black furry vest-coat. He sported a rope necklace that had twelve dragon fingers hanging down over his chest. Even on his thick leather belt, he had a metal buckle shaped as a dragon with a sword in its heart.
When Hiccup saw Astrid and Ruffnut’s reaction to his appearance, he grumbled underneath his breath. He rolled up his shoulders and looked down at his right upper arm. His muscles, or lack thereof, could not come close to compare with Bitwolf’s.
Bitwolf carried his ax over his shoulder as he glanced over the class that he was about to train. “Thanks father. I’ll take it from here.”
“Very good, son. Do me proud,” Wolfbane gave his an encouraging punch on the arm. “Let’s leave the young Vikings to their training.”
As he and Gobber made their way out of the arena to watch from outside the arena, Gobber did not hold back his concerns any longer. “Don’t you think that they should learn from a more experienced Viking?”
“My son has slain a dozen dragons since graduating from dragon training last year. How long did it take you to kill your first twelve?”
Gobber grumbled as he followed Wolfbane out of the arena. Gobber was already beginning to dislike him. Wolfbane showed no respect to him, despite Gobbers age over the visiting Viking. If it came to experience, he was certain that he had Wolfbane beat. With Ivar currently the chief in charge, Gobber would have to submit to Wolfbane's authority as well.
“I know all of you have gone through training before, but this one’s going to be a little different. I’m not going to be training you as your instructor, but as your friend.”
“Really?” Tuffnut replied with a raised eyebrow.
“We’re all young Vikings here. Tomorrow, we’ll all go hunting for dragons.”
The class all muttered in approval. They all seemed to be warming up to this new young Viking, but Hiccup remained skeptical of him. Perhaps it had something to do with the way Astrid has been looking at him. If he did not know better, he was certain that Wolfbit was looking at her too.
“But before we do that, let’s see what you can do. I’ve set up some double-stacked barrels. Chose a weapon from this stash and show me your best attack.”
“Great, I’ve always been great with the bola!” Tuffnut said proudly.
“Since when? I’ve never seen you throw a bola in my life,” Ruffnut replied.
“I’ve thrown a bola before. You’ve just never been around to see it.”
“Me, I’ve always liked the hammer. There’s something just so manly about it,” Snotlout added with a grin.
“Then how about you go first, Snotlout,” Bitwolf suggested.
“Sure,” he replied. He walked over to the wooden wall, where all different sorts of weapons and shields were hanging, and he pulled down a giant hammer. Snotlout picked a stack of barrels, and aligned himself with his target. “I’ll show all of you how it’s done.”
He raised the large hammer over and behind his head as he twisted his hips slightly to the right. He let out a grunt as he tossed it at the barrels. His hammer spiraled in the air and hit the upper barrel, tipping it slightly before it fell back into place.
“Not bad,” Bitwolf replied as the other Vikings cheered. “Tuffnut, you want to take a crack at it?”
“I’ll show you my masterful skill with a bola!” He said to his sister, taking a step towards the weapons.
Ruffnut grabbed him by the shoulder and pull him violently back behind her. “Not so fast, vomit breath. I’m going first.”
“Over my dead body!”
“How about over a black eye?” She shook her fist at him.
Bitwolf had heard about the twin's reputation to be extremely competitve towards each other. They could spend hours fighting each other, and now was not the time to waist energy on each other. “How about we move on to you, Fishlegs?”
The young, heavy-set Viking walked up to the wall of weapons and glanced over all the weapons on display. “What weapon should I use? The hammer has a plus five strength, but a negative three defense capability. The Bola: plus one strength and no defense. The ax…”
“I’ll go next,” Astrid volunteered, tired of waiting for her turn to come. With her own personal ax in hand, she stepped forward and aimed for another set of barrels.
Her aggressive nature took over, as she snarled. It was as if she was a different person altogether, and now she was someone out to make a kill. “Hiya!” She whipped her ax around and threw it at the top barrel of her set. Her ax spiraled in the air and deeply implanted itself into the wooden barrel.
“Very impressive,” Bitwolf replied with a smile. Hiccup frowned, knowing that he was trying to woo her.
“You think you can do better?” Astrid grinned as, placing her hands on her hips.
“I don’t know, let’s find out,” Bitwolf stepped forward with his ax and aligned himself with the same stack of barrels that Astrid had just attacked.
He snarled like a raging bull. His nostrils flared as he riled up his rage. He raised his ax for the throw, and instead of letting out a ferocious roar, which he had appeared to be setting up for, he threw it silently and swiftly. The blade of the ax hit the barrel right next to Astrid’s implanted ax, but upon impact, the entire barrel shattered into splinters.
“Whoa!” Everyone gasped in disbelief. Even Astrid was astonished by this amazing feat.
“How’d you do that!” Snotlout asked.
“This is a little game that we play at our village. The secret is not how hard you throw, but where you hit the barrel. ”
He could not take it any longer. Bitwolf's eyes had not departed from Astrid since this training had begun. “Well, I guess that makes it my turn!” Hiccup said, intentionally walking between Bitwolf and Astrid to get to the wall of weapons.
“If you think you’re up to it, there’s a small knife up there.”
“I'm just as Vikingly as everyone else here. I'll stick with an ax,” Hiccup responded with a slight hint of agitation.
Hiccup reached up for the ax, but dropped it almost immediately. He had to jump back in order to avoid crushing his toes.
“Hiccup, maybe…”
Astrid took a step towards him but Hiccups held up his hand to stop her. “No, I can do this.”
Hiccup reached down and grabbed the wooden handle to the ax. The ax proved to be heavier than he had hoped, but he was determined to prove that he could throw an ax, just like everyone else. He ended up dragging the weapon into position. Every one of his friends looked at each other, with concerned looks, and then took a step back.
“You can do this, Hiccup!” he said to himself. “Just build up your rage, and throw it.” He took heavy breaths and concentrated on everything that Ivar had said to him recently. Remembering everything he had said brought back all the frustration he had been feeling. In his mind’s eye, he pictured Ivar’s face on the barrel that he was aiming for.
Hiccup roared as he used all his strength to pick up the ax, spin around one full rotation, and throw it. Instead of the ax heading towards the barrel, it flew in Bitwolf’s direction. He barley was able to jump out of the way as the ax crashed on the ground exactly where he had just been standing. The young Vikings erupted in laughter.
Watching from above, Gobber could not hold back a laugh. “Hehehe! The boy’s got good aim, don't he?” He smirked towards Wolfbane.
Wolfbane was not amused. He made his way towards the entrance to the arena. Gobber chuckled as he headed back towards his blacksmith shop. He had a hunch that Hiccup was going to be heading there in the near future.
Bitwolf cleaned himself off after returning to his feet. “I think it would be better if you stick with the knife, next time.”
Embarrassed by this major mishap, he looked down at his feet, and pranced out of the arena. Astrid watched in concern, but decided to let him have some time alone. Bitwolf watched Hiccup leave, walking past his father on the way out. “I think we should call it day. Let’s go have ourselves a feast. Tomorrow, we go dragon hunting!”
Everyone cheered about the feast. Feasting was one of the several hobbies that a Viking enjoyed doing the most, and it was something that they did, very well. When Bitwolf noticed his father heading his way, he stepped back away from the other Vikings. “I’ll meet you all there in a second.”
The young Vikings headed out of the arena. Bitwolf could hear Snotlout over all the others as they departed. “Did you see that barrel shatter? He has to show me how he did that!”
When the kids were a safe distance away, Wolfbane gave his son a slap on the back. “So, son, tell me what you think?”
Bitwolf shook his head as he let out a healthy laugh. “Hiccup's the worst excuse of a Viking I have ever seen. That kid couldn’t even intimidate a fly.”
Wolfbane nodded, seeing how his son would think that after today's display. “Don’t underestimate him. He is very dangerous to my plans. I have seen him, with my own eyes, fly on the back of a Night Fury. The rumors of his ability to control dragons are all true.”
Bitwolf chuckled. “Hiccup has a pet Night Fury? That's hard to believe.”
“Be smart, my Son. Don’t be like the fool, Ivar. Smarts will always defeat brute force. Ivar can’t get his head around that, and that is his greatest weakness. Stoick’s son may have a body of a fishbone, and the strength of a flea, but he is very intelligent. You remember the plan, right?”
“Yes, you want me to learn Hiccup’s secret in getting the dragons to obey his commands.” Bitwolf rolled his eyes, getting tired of assuring his father that he knew what he was supposed to do.
“Right. Once I learn that secret, I will be ready to find that Shadow Lord and force it to submit to me. I will become the most feared Viking of them all. You just make sure that Stoick’s son is distracted. Steal away his friends, his pretty little girlfriend, or make him the biggest embarrassment of all of Berk. Do all of the above, whatever it takes to distract him."
“That shouldn’t be too hard,” Bitwolf smiled. “I already caught the eye of Astrid. Between me and Hiccup, she’d be a fool to choose him over me.”
“If you're going after the girl, then don't let her distract her. If you can win her over, then she is yours. If not, she will meet the same fate as her village. After I have my Shadow Lord, Ivar and Stoick will be my dragon‘s first meal. Then I shall burn down this pitiful village."
NEXT CHAPTER COMING 3/9/11
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Post by toothless11 on Mar 2, 2011 23:53:16 GMT -5
You put wolfbit and not wolfbane on this part: The class all muttered in approval. They all seemed to be warming up to this new young Viking, but Hiccup remained skeptical of him. Perhaps it had something to do with the way Astrid has been looking at him. If he did not know better, he was certain that Wolfbit was looking at her too.
Poor Hiccup lol. I kind of laughed when I read that he imagined Ivar's face on the barrel lol. So Wolbane and Bitwolf are evil? Well IMA KILL THEM. By each chapter that you post you don't know how much I really wanna kill Ivar and his 'vikings'. And since Hiccup is missing his leg, he should probably have problems when walking or when he throws the axe.
I beg you! Make Hiccup send the dragons away! Or just don't make anything bad happen to any of them especially Toothless! Just please, make a miracle happen that will save all of the dragons! If one of them does something to Toothless, I swear i'm going to kill them!!!
I love the story! Although I am quite furious at some characters. I look forward to the next chapter!
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 3, 2011 0:08:01 GMT -5
Actually, that usage is Bitwolf is right. I was wrong in the usage of Wolfbit in Chapter 4, that is why I made the correction. Wolfbit is the young man, who is catching the Astrid's and Ruffnut's eyes as he teaches them in dragon training.
But yea, Wolfbane and Bitwolf are the the Viking villains of the story. I thought adding Viking villains on top of a dragon villain would be the next step to take the series.
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Post by toothless11 on Mar 3, 2011 0:12:45 GMT -5
But isn't it supposed to be wolfbane and not wolfbit? Or what did you really mean by that? And nothing better happen to Toothless... I hope. But it's your story, you decide.
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 3, 2011 3:18:01 GMT -5
Sorry for the confussion. Let me explain.
In chapter 4, it is supposed to have been Wolfbane that was in the forest and caught Hiccup and Astrid riding on Toothless. He also kept his discovery a secret from Ivar when reporting back to him at the very end of the chapter. I made the mistake of calling him Bitwolf. Bitwolf, is actually Wolfbane's son, which Wolfbane had briefly mentioned in chapter 2.
This chapter, we finally are introduced to Bitwolf, and he is instantly trying to befriend the young Vikings and trying to win the heart of Astrid. Wolfbane is using his son, to find out Hiccup's "secret" about riding dragons so he can control the Shadow Lord dragon and use the dragon to kill Stoick and Ivar.
Sorry for the confusion. Wolfbane is the second in command under Ivar, and Bitwolf is Wolfbane's son, who is training the the gang. I meant to show that the father and son relationship with their names just like Spitelout is the father of Snotlout. The father's occasionally take a part of their name and add it to their offspring's name. Of course this is not always the case; Hiccup for example. I would guess, Ruffnut and Tuffnut probably had the name 'nut' handed down to them by their father.
Again, sorry for the confusion. I hope this clarifies things a little. I will try to avoid make this mistake again.
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Post by toothless11 on Mar 3, 2011 7:54:46 GMT -5
Yeah no problem. I pretty muc forgot, what Hiccup's secret is lol. It's been like almost 2 months that I don't watch the movie because it's on my iPod and I've been quite busy because of school these days. I hope the shadow lord ends up eating them both lol. Will Ivar continue to be evil at the end?
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 3, 2011 14:18:08 GMT -5
I think you will be very satisfied with the ending and how Ivar is handled.
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Post by toothless11 on Mar 3, 2011 18:51:16 GMT -5
Ok, so I guess I'll like it! Lol. Hey I got another question, when wolfbane saw Hiccup and Astrid get off of Toothless, how did he know that he was a night fury? In the movie when Hiccup explains about a night fury, he says that no one has ever seen a night fury. So Wolfbane alreadysaw a night fury? Or he already killed one? Or in his village there are night fury's in the arena for training? I would like to know.
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Post by nightfurymaster on Mar 3, 2011 19:22:14 GMT -5
I'll bet that since they (most likely) know what most other dragons look like, he may have just assumed that with its features this was probably a Night Fury.
Fantastic story!! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 3, 2011 19:43:23 GMT -5
Ivar's clan has seen exotic dragons that Berk has not. In Ivar's first arrival, he makes mention that he was attacked by a Monstrous Strangulator. That's another dragon that the people of Berk had not seen before.
Based on the first movie, and the Berks, I got the distinct feelings that the Vikings of Berk don't explore too far away from home, so they are only aware of the dragons in their small remote area and from Stoick's and Gobbers exotic adventures.
In the second book, they encounter the Monstrous Strangulator, and have never had heard of the dragon. That's why I pay tribute to the book by bring that dragon into this story. In the first movie, they have never seen Gigantius Maxiums (Green Death) before, so it appears that there are plenty of dragons that they have not heard of before.
Since Ivar and his tribes are from a whole different area of the world, I think it's safe to assume that are dragons that are indigenous to where Ivar is that are not to Berk. Very much the same way as certain animals are indigenous to certain areas like the Kangaroo to Australia.
A Night Fury is rare, but Ivar is known for hunting rare and exotic dragons. Whether he has hunted one down or not, is not known, but there could be no doubt that he has heard of them. I mean, in the movie, no one had ever seen a Night Fury before, but they know of them. How did Hiccup first recognize Toothless to be a Night Fury, when he had never seen one either? He recognized him because a Night Fury pretty much stands out among all the other dragons. It's the only pure black dragon out there, until now with the Shadow Lord (the cousin of the Night Fury). So if Hiccup could immediately know that Toothless was a Night Fury at first sight, it only stands to reason that Wolfbane would as well.
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Post by toothless11 on Mar 3, 2011 19:50:35 GMT -5
Oh ok now I understand. Did Ivar really kill a night fury before? He's your character so you can decide anything for him. Sorry for too many questions.
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Post by mrjop2 on Mar 3, 2011 23:55:30 GMT -5
Sure, no problem. This story will never say if he actually killed a Night Fury or not, but I would be leaning towards not. Between a Night Fury and a Shadow Lord, Ivar would hands down be in favor of going after the Shadow Lord, since the Shadow Lord contains scales which are stronger than stone. It's scales are much more valuable than that of a Night Fury. Ivar has said that he wants to kill the Shadow Lord dragon for it's scales, so he can turn them into stronger weapons.
Ivar definitely has not started a quest to find a Night Fury, because as rare as they are, It's scales are of no use to him. Again, the story will not say specifically, but I imagine that even Ivar could not kill a Night Fury due to it's elusiveness when wild. Night Furies attack from a distance, and rarely shows itself when attacking. If Ivar really put his mind to it, then he probably could find a way to kill one, but again, up to this point, he has no real reason to do so yet. He has become to obsessed with the Shadow Lord.
As you can tell, I've really done some research before starting this story. I actually started the research for the story in December, and did not start writing it until February.
(The Shadow Lord dragon is not a real dragon from the books. It is fan created dragon from Wikipedia, which I sought out permission to use for this story. I did take a few, small liberties to make it fit into the story. If they are reading this story, I hope I am making them proud.)
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