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Post by toothless11 on Jan 22, 2011 23:33:00 GMT -5
I can't wait! Too bad it'll take so long.
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Post by azdgari on Jan 23, 2011 1:05:51 GMT -5
It's actually really fast for me. I'm a massive rewriter/perfectionist.
I finished it just now though, so hopefully it'll be up tomorrow night after I edit it. I hope you all enjoy it! ^^
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 23, 2011 1:10:37 GMT -5
Yay!!
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Post by azdgari on Jan 23, 2011 1:47:53 GMT -5
Just kidding, posted it already! I edited it quickly and couldn't wait to upload. Enjoy! ^^
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 23, 2011 12:53:25 GMT -5
Very nice! I loved it! Though im not sure about the part that says "He put his life in my hands each time he flew with me… and I put my life in his." The first thing that I thought was that Toothless doesn't have hands, so maybe you can try and replacing that part with something similar. And when you put "burck" is that how Toothless says it? Because it's actually spelled "Berk".
Still I loved it! Good work!
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Post by azdgari on Jan 23, 2011 13:20:35 GMT -5
Good point! I changed it to paws. ^^
And yes, that's just how Toothless imagines it's spelled based off how it sounds to him.
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 23, 2011 16:38:38 GMT -5
Ah, ok. I can't wake for the next fic!
Oh, and another slight error at the same part, where it says "and I put my life in his.", you should add "hands" after "his", because it practically means that Hiccup has paws.
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Post by azdgari on Jan 23, 2011 17:23:00 GMT -5
That was actually left there on purpose; I like that toothless refers to Hiccup's hand as paws. ^^
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 23, 2011 23:14:23 GMT -5
Ah ok then, it's good anyways!
Your next fic is the 'not so fireproof' scene right?
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Post by azdgari on Jan 24, 2011 18:41:23 GMT -5
I wrote it, but it's kinda short. Should I extend it beyond just what's in the movie? ^^
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 24, 2011 18:44:17 GMT -5
Do you mean adding it more stuff?
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Post by azdgari on Jan 24, 2011 18:52:03 GMT -5
Yeah, add my own idea of what happened after that scene ends in the movie?
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Post by toothless11 on Jan 24, 2011 18:54:57 GMT -5
Yeah ok
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Post by Spaghetticus on Jan 24, 2011 21:46:31 GMT -5
Yeah, add my own idea of what happened after that scene ends in the movie? I think it would make it more interesting to read, regardless of what you already have.  |
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Post by azdgari on Jan 25, 2011 0:17:52 GMT -5
Updated, I didn't feel like adding onto it. =P
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